Reviews For One Naughty Seed
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Reviewer: Biker Dash Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28/02/14 - 02:02 pm Title: Act 1

I noticed a couple if minor mistakes, but beyond that, this is showing itself to be up to the high standards which you have shown with your stories! It has earned a full ten stars from me! XD

Reviewer: Biker Dash Signed [Report This]
Date: 28/02/14 - 01:14 pm Title: Who is that Girl?

I see it has been corrected, and this went from the WoT to an excellent fic equal to what I have seen from your past outstanding fics. 

Reviewer: Flutterbutt Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20/02/14 - 11:22 pm Title: Who is that Girl?

Would like to see more. Learn to separate paragraphs--the wall of text made this difficult to read. Lemme just quickly tell you how to properly separate them.

When beginning a new topic, a new paragraph is created. When a new person is speaking, a new paragraph is created. Otherwise, you create new paragraphs after four sentences (weak paragraph) or six sentences (strong paragraph).

Not too sure about the last part--I learned it in eighth grade.

Other than the wall of text, it was pretty good. Just enough teasing with it, please. I want to see some foal rape.

Please continue this and maybe also follow my advice.

6/10



Author's Response:

I had a little trouble setting it up right on my computer; but don't worry, I plan to fix it soon. Hope you're enjoying it so far.

Reviewer: Biker Dash Signed [Report This]
Date: 16/02/14 - 12:49 am Title: Who is that Girl?

Ok, I would have read this, except that you seem to have no concept of paragraphs. This went from being a story to being a wall of text. You should correct that.



Author's Response:

Sorry, I do plan to fix that. I was having a little problem setting it up right with my computer and I decided to leave it and fix it later. Hope you still enjoy it regardless.

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