Date: 14/08/14 - 01:57 am Title: Question
I can't say my favorite kind of story is the one about an OC with a tragic past in first person who moves to Ponyville and meets all the main 6, and nopony else. It doesn't have nearly enough transformation fetish fuel in it for me. Thus I don't feel I'm the best person, or pony, to review it. I admittedly skimmed most of it, so may have missed something. It's... legible?
*laughs* Sorry about that. Having the OC meet the mane 6 felt like the right move when I wrote it and I will openly admit it slogs along at first, considering how much further I intend to take the story from here, but one of my own peeves as a writer is when things are jumped into too quickly. I don't think I get to the actual crux of things until the third or fourth chapter, but it was more to establish the OC as an OC before introducing a new OC.
As for the first person bit, I'm sorry if it's not your cup of tea, I felt it was the right move considering the basis of the story.
At least it's legible, I was freaking out for a while over the format of the writing, wasn't sure to leave it blocks or space it out every time somepony speaks. Still trying to wrap my head around that, to be honest.