Date: 16/03/12 - 01:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great story! Great amount of details. Perfect story before the ''naughty part'' began.
However. The end may have been cliffhanger, but I still think it was too abrupt.
I somewhat expected to get to read something like: ''As AJ didn't know what to do with the pens, she lifted up the broken mug and placed it and the pens back on the desk''
And then somekind of knowing that Diamond Tiaras parent was just about to use one of them.
Summary: Great story but too rushed to a cliffhanger.