Date: 15/08/12 - 09:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
I do adore this story, and breakfast, but this seriously needs editing.
I don't know if you usually edit your own stories, but this one borders on wall-texting, and has some word issues here and there.
It was, as usual, really sexy, but the quality of the formatting is lower than the prequel.
Date: 10/07/12 - 08:19 pm Title: Chapter 1
I, for one, love the notion of magical, edible food ponies who love sex. And the way that RagingSemi describes both the action and the flavor are equally appealing - I get both horny and hungry. I mean, pulling one of Barbecue's balls off (knowing it'll grow back) and finding it made of dry-rubbed brisket? I may be straight, but I love the delicious insanity of it all. RagingSemi's talents for description and running the narrative is non pareil, as the Flim Flam Brothers would put it. And, as they say in comedy, "you buy the premise, you buy the bit", and I'm happy to buy the entire thing. More food ponies, please.
Date: 05/07/12 - 12:38 am Title: Chapter 1
Ok, I love your work, and this is no exception, but there are no words to describe how confused I feel. I understand some of the food ponies, coke pony, OJ pony, and chocolate pony, but why Onion Ring? Do they regenerate after you take a bite out of them? Why do I have a hard-on?